It is very confusing that I am going completely out of order!! Oh well. So packet two was actually a productive packet, aside from my dream dilemma. I was still working out how to write the dream narration, but I did start a chapter where Emma goes inside Karley's house. There was "nice pacing" according to Reiko as Emma started toward the house. And I actually did an okay job of describing the house. I did get stuck once Emma opened a box she found...but I picked back up in the next packet, and it was fine. Reiko asked some questions that helped me place myself in the reader's mind (again...) so that was helpful. All together, I wrote 14 pages of fiction for this packet. I am going to write a post with all my critical work also...but I will do that later. Here is a peek from this packet:
Luckily, the houses adjacent to Karley's were separated by enough space that it was unlikely anyone would notice here, even if they happen to glance outside. Even so, she sprinted from the edge of the woods until she reached the far side of the house. Then she waited, watching and listening for any signs that she'd been spotted. Her heavy breathing - either from the sprinting or from her fraying nerves, she wasn't sure - competed only wiht the song of crickets in the far distance.
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