It is very confusing that I am going completely out of order!! Oh well. So packet two was actually a productive packet, aside from my dream dilemma. I was still working out how to write the dream narration, but I did start a chapter where Emma goes inside Karley's house. There was "nice pacing" according to Reiko as Emma started toward the house. And I actually did an okay job of describing the house. I did get stuck once Emma opened a box she found...but I picked back up in the next packet, and it was fine. Reiko asked some questions that helped me place myself in the reader's mind (again...) so that was helpful. All together, I wrote 14 pages of fiction for this packet. I am going to write a post with all my critical work also...but I will do that later. Here is a peek from this packet:
Luckily, the houses adjacent to Karley's were separated by enough space that it was unlikely anyone would notice here, even if they happen to glance outside. Even so, she sprinted from the edge of the woods until she reached the far side of the house. Then she waited, watching and listening for any signs that she'd been spotted. Her heavy breathing - either from the sprinting or from her fraying nerves, she wasn't sure - competed only wiht the song of crickets in the far distance.
Monday, November 19, 2012
Thursday, November 15, 2012
November 15, 2012 - notes on Packet 3
For some reason, my flashdrive does not have my creative work from packet two, so I will have to come back to that one later! So, during this packet, I took a little break from my long critical paper because packet two was consumed with it. Instead, I focused on my three annotations and my creative work (although this was my worst creative packet this semster!) I completed three annotations - and it was a lot of reading! I read The Likeness, The Gathering, and Amnesia. Overall, I loved all three books. It was ironic, though, because I had purchased The Gathering a few years ago, but I only read two chapters then and didn't like it. This time, given that I HAD to read it, I started liking it the further I read. Amnesia was cool...but I hated that it ended without any real resolution. During this packet, all three books (not planned!) were set in Ireland. So...I started using words like "arse" and "bugger" all the time! Anyway, my creative packet was tough. It had some good plot, but I had too much "authorial" nature to it...I explained too much instead of just letting it happen. I tried a flashback...and got WAY too detailed, so I need to cut a lot of that. But, here is a peek:
She turned the corner of the house and half-walked, half-ran to the woods. The ground seemed to tilt beneath her feet as she stepped through the brush. Dizziness swept through her, and she worried that she might actually pass out right there among the tree roots and crawling insects.
Flashes of dream penetrated her waking world like shadows of hallucinations. She saw Karley’s closet again, the colored t-shirts taking shape before her so that she felt she could reach out and pull one from its hanger.
Her beacon of light spliced through the darkness. The opening was near; she started sprinting, not caring if branches scratched her face or the forearm she used as a shield.
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